Realised Fairy Tale (part three)

It’s been a crazy few days and so my writing time has been divided into bits and pieces. It makes me worried that this is too choppy. The seams don’t feel smooth. Or perhaps I have just read and reread it too many times.
What do you think? Disjointed? Suggestions.
https://littlelearner.wordpress.com/2015/01/30/realised-fairy-tale-part-three/

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