Comment on my post

Hello Everyone,

I would like to ask few questions about my post

http://valiantwarrior.wordpress.com/2014/12/05/my-tribute-to-tugce-albayrak/

1. In the first paragraph the sentence is quite large. Is it fine or I need to change it?

2. I have written ” some day or other” in the first paragraph. Is it correct?

3. Do you got a perception that I have ended it quite hurriedly?

Looking forward for your response

Regards

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