Deepest Treasures (part eleven)

Hmm. This one was difficult. It was much wordier than it is now. It has been through editing and editing and editing. I would appreciate your advice on trimming. Does it need more editing? Too wordy? Argh.
Thank you.
http://littlelearner.wordpress.com/2014/11/27/deepest-treasures-part-eleven/

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