The Window – (Hub Challenge)

I made an attempt to write a story based on the three pictures. I would appreciate any comments and constructive feedback. (See below) Thank you.

http://pricelessjoy.co/2014/11/10/the-window/

  • I sort of got into a hurry at the end. Does that ruin the story?
  • Any ideas on improvements? Does it need to be meatier, longer…?
  • Writing sugggestions?
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