Here’s another crack at Hub…

Here’s another crack at Hub Challenge #2. I wanted to sharpen my fiction skills a bit. The lyrics that I’ve worked in are a bit ‘square peg in a round hole’ and I think some of my sentences run a bit long and rambling. Thoughts?

http://whisper2scream.wordpress.com/2014/11/04/the-hub-challenge-2-second-attempt-planting-a-lyric-seed/

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