The Hub Challenge 2: Planting a Lyric Seed

Here’s mine: http://loopylozzie.wordpress.com/2014/10/29/the-hub-challenge-2-planting-a-lyric-seed/

I love these types of challenges hence why I did it immediately, I went onto my phone and shuffled my songs and to get the first one that came up, the song and the artist are in italics 🙂

Feedback questions:
1. Do you get the sense of the character being clueless of her surroundings?
2. Does the style in which I wrote it help convey someone without memories?
3. Do you recon I could have conveyed the character better?

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