Editing help…I’m submitting this to a magazine.

I suggested an adoption piece to a parenting magazine, and they asked me to submit a 750-word story for consideration. This is the one I wrote for them, but I’ll have to cut it down, and I’d love some input. Get out your red pens!
(Now is your chance to get me back for picking YOUR piece apart!) 😉

If you think one of my other adoption pieces would be a better submission, please let me know…I have a really hard time choosing.