Greetings Hub Members –
Here’s a link to the full version of my 4th micro-memoir. I’m interested in any feedback that’s offered and specifically anything regarding:
1. Length – do I drag things out too much
2. The epilogue – do the final 2 paragraphs add value?
3. Sentence fluency – some of my sentences run a bit long and complex in an effort to inject a bit of humor (for example – At 98, my eyes fell on the most colorful card in the bunch and I reached for it with the determination of someone choosing something for reasons other than its pretty color.) Are they too hard to follow and make the reader tired?