Micro-Memoir #4 – Reaching for the Topps

Greetings Hub Members –

Here’s a link to the full version of my 4th micro-memoir.  I’m interested in any feedback that’s offered and specifically anything regarding:

1.  Length – do I drag things out too much

2.  The epilogue – do the final 2 paragraphs add value?

3.  Sentence fluency – some of my sentences run a bit long and complex in an effort to inject a bit of humor (for example – At 98, my eyes fell on the most colorful card in the bunch and I reached for it with the determination of someone choosing something for reasons other than its pretty color.)  Are they too hard to follow and make the reader tired?

Many thanks.

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