Hey guys, better late than…

Hey guys, better late than never right. Here’s my assignment for this weeks #DearMe.
http://randomsbyarandom.wordpress.com/2014/10/27/a-letter/
If you do have time to check it out, I’d like to know:
1) Was there any fluctuation between past and present tenses? It has been an issue with my writing.

2) do you think it needs more ‘tightening’, more use of bolder or strong words?
Thanks in advance 🙂

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