Something I’ve been working on . . .

Even though this is not finished, I thought I would throw it out here for comment.
I was tired after getting this far and thought I’d back away for a while.
If you have the time to read, let me know if it captures your attention.
Do I reveal too much or not enough?
Anything awkward or unclear? Timeline? Does it flow?
Thanks, everyone. I value your input!
http://littlelearner.wordpress.com/2014/10/25/deeper-treasures-part-one/

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