Hey guys, here’s a link…

Hey guys, here’s a link to a serial fiction piece I’m writing. The purpose is not really to share a story but rather to keep on improving my writing with every piece
Here are some specific questions:
Do you think there is an improvement from the 1st part?
Between the dialogue, descriptive and narrative aspects- which is better written and which aspect do I need to work more on.
Thanks for taking the time to check it out 🙂